one of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Thanks to medicine our life expectancy, in

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developed countries, is longer than in the past. I partially agree with the idea that

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new reality brings with it more benefits than drawbacks. There are

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the development of medicine, your quality

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can really increase because there are many simple possibilities to deal with different diseases.

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or pneumonia you could not be certain to survive, but today the scenario is different and you can recover quickly from these illnesses.

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, you have the possibility to enjoy your retirement. Maybe we do not think about it, as we spend most of our lives working.

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the other hand, the costs of healthcare have grown.

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reason, some governments, like Switzerland, must ask

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their populations to pay more for medical care.

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healthcare insurance is mandatory, so you do not have any chance to cope with it.

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medicine is giving us many possibilities to enjoy more our lives, but governments should find a solution to avoid

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Topic Vocabulary:

consequences
improved medical care
life expectancy
advantages
disadvantages
healthcare
quality of life
population
economic burden
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technology
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one of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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The US film industry has too much influence on the film industry around the world. Governments have a duty to invest money in their own film industries to protect and develop their cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Large companies should pay higher salaries to CEOs and executives compared to other workers.To what extent do you agree or disagree? (Write 250 words.)

In some nations ,they have the option to import food fr all around the glob. To what extent do you think its benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

Environmental problems are becoming a global issue, and therefore, some people suggest that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale. To what extent do you agree or disagree?