Some people think that the most important function of music is to help people relax.To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many parts of the community think that
music
has a big influence on people's daily moods because it can relieve stress. It can be true for some communities, but others think that melody can disturb their comfort too. This
essay will discuss these different views and give a conclusion.
On the one hand, listening to some kind of tune can lower the stress level because the beat can make bodies calm. For example
, slow-pop melody can help students to be more focused while
studying or listening to their favourite singing when in the operating room will avoid the fear of the patient. Other professionals also
recommend parents let their baby listen to jazz melodies in the womb because it will help the baby's brain
grow well so
which will make them smart.
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On the other hand
, many think that tune is a noisy sound that can annoy activity. For instance
, someone who wants to sleep should make their brain
stop working, but music
will make some parts of our brain
still work. Humans can more concentrate and focus when they don't listen to any kind of sound. In this
calmness, our brain
just thinks about the activity that we face without any disturbance because our brain
doesn't need to process another input.
In conclusion, I hardly believe that music
can make anyone relax based on the activity that is
done and the personality of each person. We can hear music
as long as we think it could increase our productivity. But, we should respect others' personal space, so it's important to use headphones or earphones when listening to music
in public areas to make anyone feel comfortable.Submitted by dewintaputri23 on
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