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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels
There is an ongoing debate nowadays, about whether all
cars
 based on fossil
fuels
 should be replaced by electric ones or not. I believe that electric vehicles should definitely take their place because they not only work on an infinite and cheap
energy
 source but
also
 are more convenient and environmentally friendly. Utilizing electric vehicles can significantly affect
air
 pollution, and have positive impacts on the environment. Using fossil
fuels
 for
cars
 is usually considered the main reason for
air
 pollution and environmental damage these days, which can
also
 bring about an array of health problems for people.
Initially
, these electric
cars
 work on hydraulic-based electricity, which has no negative consequences on the
air
 quality, and their gas emission is about zero. To illustrate, numerous European countries could maintain the
air
 quality by providing the infrastructures for using these types of
cars
;
hence
 they could reduce the amount of gas emissions and offer healthy and green lives to their citizens.
Consequently
,
this
 replacement would be highly beneficial for both society and individuals.
Additionally
,
this
 replacement can vanish the
energy
 catastrophe concerns, which can
also
 impress a nation’s political status and independence. Fossil
energy
resources
 are not infinite and humankind is now facing
energy
 usage problems, by the reduction of these
resources
as a result
 of mass exploitation in the
last
 decades.
Furthermore
, some countries do not have access to these
energy
resources
,
thus
 they have to allocate a great proportion of money to just provide enough fuel for personal
cars
, which can even endanger national security. To exemplify, Japan has no fossil
energy
resources
 and to maintain its independence, tried to meet the citizen’s needs only by means of electric
energy
.
As a result
, it has no problem in providing
energy
 and does not have to beg other countries for fossil
fuels
, thanks to its smart policy. In conclusion, I opine that replacing
cars
 based on fossil
fuels
 with electric ones, is a highly beneficial development, since it can reduce pollution, and
also
 bring about not only concern-free but
also
 convenient lives for the masses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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