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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#year #school #university
Nowadays, having a
year
 gap between
end
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 of the high
school
 level and starting
university
 has sharply become popular.
Also
, there are some advantages like becoming more relaxed,
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 out more than before with friends and spending more
time
 with family members.
Moreover
, it has many negative points too,
Such
 as ,adaption to doing nothing, being lazy and senseless about studying and forgetting
your
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the
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 past
knwoledge
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knowledge
 that you learned in high
school
. In my opinion,
disadvantages
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 of
this
 decision
is
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 more than
it
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its
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 profits. The most important benefit is being relaxed after high
school
. When you have enough
time
 to enjoy
after
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yourself after
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your
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high
school
, you may be more pleased. when you become calmer it has a result to be more practical than when you were in anxiety.
For example
, one of my friends had a
year
 gap before
university
. she became stressless and she had enough
time
 and,
as a result
, applied for a high-level major in America.
Therefore
, the most
importand
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important
 benefit becoming more peaceful.
Moreover
, the most important drawback is adapting to do nothing in one
year
 that you do not have any study before
university
. The reason is when
in
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for
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 a period of
time
 you get used to
do
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 something
that is
 enjoyable.
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Therefore
, you cannot be good after one
year
 of doing nothing.
For instance
, my cousin was not accepted
in
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into
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university
 for the first
time
 and she had to have a
year
 gap.
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Additionally
, she became lazy, so she could not start her
university
.
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, the most important bad point is getting used to
dpoing
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doing
 nothing. To
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sum up
, having a
year
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 rest before
accademic
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academic
 study
in
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at
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university
 now has become
significently intresting
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significantly interesting
. As I mentioned earlier, it has
possitive
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positive
 effects like being more
relax
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,
having
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and having
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 enough
time
 to spend with friends and family and negative effects like
,
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 doing nothing as a habit, becoming sluggish and forgetting some lessons that you learned in
school
 so
becoause
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because
 most
of
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people
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the people
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 cannot
contorol
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control
 their free
time
 and they mostly
loose
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 their chance of gaining
achivement
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achievement
achievements
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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