Government spend millions of dollars each year on their space programmes Most recently Mars is the focus of scientists attention' . Some people think this money would be better spent on dealing with closer to home. Do you agree or disagree?

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.Most of them are educated and have
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aim
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.In our country government spend all
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to
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rubbish
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.They should look after and focus on scientists .We have
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profit
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from them.All the new ideas and
things
are born by scientists.They can control
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world.If some virus came through
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they can
handel
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handle
it and many other
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with them.They have many ideas and knowledge
in
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everything .They had
proctet
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protected
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their country by making
bom
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and other
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the ideas are given by them .To make
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the plane
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plane
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rocket
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up to scientists .Many of
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tequnik are made by them
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vehicles
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etc. Government should
also
look after other
assosieres
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associates
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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