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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

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 research has always been fascinating and has priority in many countries. Many people support
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 planet exploration
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 others criticize large spending in
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 sector,
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 suggesting diverting attention towards societal issues. I do believe in prioritizing public concerns but not agree with the statement completely.
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, It is required to know for what purpose states are using their big annual funding budget in
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 life. It not alone strengthens their image but
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 actually helps in improving some society-related issues. With
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 science and satellite help, the authorities get to know geographical changes before any catastrophe, enhanced electromagnetic signals to improve mobile and internet networks, check on neighbouring enemy countries and increase army strength, and even improve the agricultural sector.
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 research is helping people in their day-to-day life. 
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in developing nations, the priority is to provide basic amenities like good food and water, a safe and clean environment and a home to stay.
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 they are facing these challenges and which get
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 worsened in the absence of advanced technologies.
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, as these unions do not get a prior warning of floods or any other nature calamity
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 the absence of a
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 program,
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 results in
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 damage to their society and in turn public concerns. In conclusion, I believe, it is required to explore
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 and spend money in
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 field in order to improve the community's life. Government should educate its population to make them understand the need for
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 exploration.
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