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The chart illustrates estimated maximum population of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004

The chart illustrates estimated maximum population of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004
The graph chart provides information on the estimation of Asian
elephants
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' greatest population over a seven-year period in different countries.
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, in 2004, the number of Asian
elephants
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 experienced a downward trend, especially in India, Malaysia and Thailand where they decreased significantly.
According to
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 the graph,
Although
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 India had the most
elephants
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 both in 1997 and 2004, these numbers dropped sharply from just under 10,000 to around 7,500.
Similarly
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, Thailand and Malaysia
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 displayed precipitous downturns, dipping approximately 2,000
elephants
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 between 1997 and 2004. Meanwhile, other countries
such
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 as Vietnam, Sri Lanka, Myanmar and China, illustrated a gentle fall of less than 1,000
elephants
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 over the 20-year period. Meanwhile, Laos was the only nation that remained stable, hovering just over 1,000
elephants
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 in those two time periods (1997 and 2004).
In contrast
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 to the remaining nations, Cambodia was the only one that had a surge of
elephants
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, gradually peaking at approximately 1,500.

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