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Space travel has been possible for some time. Some people think space tourism could be developed in the future which can help to develop countries' economies. To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development ?

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In recent years, because it is practical for humans to explore outer
space
, some
people
 suggest that governments and entrepreneurs should enhance
space
 flights for tourism
due to
 its economic benefits.
However
, from my personal perspective, I do believe that
disadvantages
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this
 tendency brings to society are outweighed by much more considerable merits. On the one hand,
space
 travel would inflict some potential downsides.
To begin
 with, it is harmful and unsustainable to the environment.
This
 is because
during
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 active processes, rockets and spaceships release a huge amount of toxic fumes and harmful substances into the atmosphere.
This
 intensifies global warming and results in an array of other negative consequences.
For instance
, rocket launches are supposed to be the perpetrator behind 20% of ozone depletion every year.
Moreover
, radiation is
also
 a concern of tourists, as some astronauts were reported to be badly affected
on
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well-being
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 because of strong radiation from the sun. High exposure can damage the immune system, causing astronauts to be susceptible to infection
while
 in
space
. Despite the above downsides, I suppose that
traveling
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 to
space
 offers certain advantages. First and foremost, it can improve national economies.
This
 is because a new developing sector requires a huge source of humans and finance so companies and the authorities have to invest much capital in it,
therefore
 providing numerous job opportunities for
people
.
For instance
, since Vietnam is the country chosen by Russia to construct the spaceport, more than 20000 jobs have been generated.
Furthermore
,
space
 travel could bring tourists a sense of adventure as they are able to experience the feelings of astronauts and unravel the mysteries of
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. Because of that, customers can invest a great amount of money
on
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 it, and nations would invest that money for improving their economies and public infrastructure,
therefore
 helping
people
 lead a higher quality life. In conclusion,
although
 tourist-oriented
space
 travel brings
to
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the
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people
 some demerits, I opine that its advantages are more significant to society
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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