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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,  describe the situation  explain your problems and why it is difficult to work  say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to express my difficulties regarding the
roommate
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 arrangement for my accommodation. Currently, I am a third-year majoring in Industrial engineering and live in
college
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a college
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 dorm on the 5th
floors
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floor
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 with a
roommate
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 from
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the arts
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arts
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 department. I just moved to
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 college dorm because it's closest to the campus and offers many facilities. Unfortunately, there are several problems with my
roommate
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. Allow me to elaborate on the
situations
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situation
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.
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, my
roommate
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 always brings his friends over to the dorm every weekend, which was really annoying because I could not enjoy my rest time.
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, my final thesis is approaching and I could not focus
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 his
habits
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habit
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 that always like to
turned
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 on loud music.
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,
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 really
affect
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affects
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 my concentration. I would like to live in a room by myself with quiet and
peace
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condition
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conditions
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, I prefer to live on the first floor because it's more convenient and the lift always broke down.
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, I
am greatly appreciate
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greatly appreciate
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if
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it if
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 you can grant my request. Thank you for considering my request and looking forward
for
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to
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 your reply. Yours sincerely, Jun
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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