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the chart below shows the number of houesholds in the us by thier annual income in 2007 , 2011 and 2015

the chart below shows the number of houesholds in the us by thier annual income in 2007 , 2011 and 2015
#houesholds #thier #income
The bar chart given compares the number of households and their salary per annum in
USA
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 between the
years
 2007, 2011, and 2015. The unit of measurement is millions.
Overall
,
household
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a household
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 that has $75,000-$99,999 have relatively the same
amoount
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amount
 of
income
 in all the
years
 provided. A
simillar
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similar
 trend
is observe
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is observed
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 with the lowest
income
 holders (less than $25,0000) in 2011
abd
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and
 2015,
while
, people with $100,000 or more
has
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have
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 the
higest
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highest
 earnings in 2015. It is
also
 interesting to note that families with $50,000-$74,999
income
 have a constant salary throughout the
years
. On the
on
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one
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 hand,
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an individual
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individual
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individuals
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 with the highest
income
 ($100,000 or more) started in 2007 with approximately 30
million
, it was
on
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in
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 2011 that it experience a minimal decline from about 27
million
, and
then
, it rose
on
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in
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 2015 nearly reaching 35
million
 households.
On the other hand
, households with $25,000-$49,000
income
 per year started
in
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at
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a
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the
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 27
million
 mark
where
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which
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it
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apply
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increase to
30million
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30 million
 in four
years
then
 decrease a little in the final year by roughly 28
million
. A steady value is seen with $50,000-$74,000 household earnings with an estimate of
21million
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21 million
 people. In a like manner, with just 15
million
familiies
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families
 in 2007-
2011
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,2011
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 it was $75,000-$99,000 total amount had a steady rate respectively.
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