You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, - describe the situation - explain your problems and why it is difficult to work - say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

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Dear Sir or Madam, Allow me to introduce myself, my name is Ale and I am a

third year

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student majoring in economic business. I am writing

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letter regarding my room partners issue that made me difficult to work.

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, I have a side job in the

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of the city which start after college. It started on Monday until Saturday from 5 PM to 9 PM.

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, the job made me

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to college at 9.30 PM. During

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conditions, I had to take a rest after work.

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taking a rest, my roommates played

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loudly.

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, I had discussed with him about my conditions, but he still rises some noises that made me uncomfortable to release my tiredness. I kindly ask your help to relocate me or my roommates because of

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issue. I would like you to consider my suggestion to resolve

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matter. Yours faithfully, Ale

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

accommodation officer
roommate
share a room
living arrangement
difficult to work
noise levels
study environment
privacy concerns
alternative accommodation
single room
academic performance
well-being
respectfully request

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