You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, - describe the situation - explain your problems and why it is difficult to work - say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir or Madam, Allow me to introduce myself, my name is Ale and I am a
third year
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student majoring in economic business. I am writing
this
letter regarding my room partners issue that made me difficult to work.
Firstly
, I have a side job in the
center
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of the city which start after college. It started on Monday until Saturday from 5 PM to 9 PM.
Secondly
, the job made me
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to college at 9.30 PM. During
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conditions, I had to take a rest after work.
In
contrast
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taking a rest, my roommates played
musics
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loudly.
Consequently
, I had discussed with him about my conditions, but he still rises some noises that made me uncomfortable to release my tiredness. I kindly ask your help to relocate me or my roommates because of
this
issue. I would like you to consider my suggestion to resolve
about
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this
matter. Yours faithfully, Ale
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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