The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The given pie graph illustrates the working rate of graduated students in anthropology after completing their undergraduate degree,
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the given table presents their salary of them in three major fields: freelance consultants, government sector, and private companies after five years of occupation.
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, the majority of graduated individuals had started their job as full-time workers. In therm of salaries, the vast majority of them had earned over $75,000 as having a part in government and being a freelancer.
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, only roughly half of the private sector employees did the same.
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with, more than half of the anthropologists with
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went on work as full-time members.
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, less than a fifth of them had part-time jobs and 12% remained unemployed.
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a majority of them continued their studies to seek higher education ( 8% full-time plan and 5% work-study ) , there is no reported information for a small minority of them in general. Moving into salaries, a total proportion of 80% earned at least $75,000 as freelancers and government employees. In the meantime, nearly half of them in each work field earned over $100,000. In comparison, only 55% of people who works in private companies earned the same amount with a minimum of $75,000. The average percentages of all types remained under 10% earning $49,999 maximumly after working for a period of five years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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