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Many people prefer to live in their own house, while others are prepared to live in rental properties. Discuss both views, give your own opinion and examples.

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In
this
 modern era, The majority of citizens are to live in their own houses. but some
society
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societies
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 prefer to live in rental
properties
. in
this
 essay, I will show the pros and cons of the search for the conclusion.
Firstly
, some
society
 prefers to live in their own houses. because of the significant
improvement
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 they could get.
Moreover
, owning a place would be an asset for them and they do not need to worry about shifting or finding a new location every year.
furthermore
,
society
 could live comfortably and without any disturbance. because of the conflicts that happen between landlords and tenants.
For instance
, my uncle was suffering from depression, because his landlord was extremely arrogant toward him and frequently asked him to pay extra money every month.
On the other hand
, in
this
 modern era,
society
prefer
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 to live in rental
properties
 because rental
properties
 are way more affordable than owning
properties
.
moreover
,
society
get
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significant
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a significant
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 profit
of
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from
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 shifting location
according to
 their work and business.
Also
, they get the advantage of not paying property taxes and mortgages.
Furthermore
, living in a rental house illustrates remote opportunities.
for instance
, my co-worker lives in a rental house near work. which illustrates him more advantages and prevents
to
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him to
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 waste his time and travel less than others. In conclusion, living in a rental and owning
properties
 have pros and cons. but in my opinion, living in a rental property is more worthy than owning a place. because
rental
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a rental
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 house illustrates more advantages than owning.
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