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Some people think news has no connection to peoples lives. Therefore, it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a widespread belief that newspapers and
television
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 podcasts are currently unrealistic for human well-being,
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 investing effort in researching
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information
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 is unnecessary. From a personal perspective, I completely disagree with
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 assertion because there are still many advantages to regularly updating
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. On the one hand,
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 reports or
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 shows appear to show all of the unpleasant aspects of daily life.
Due to
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 our increasingly busy schedules, individuals are really much less aware of the potential negative aspects of their environment. As long as the
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 is occasionally updated, people will always be able to identify negative aspects and remain aggressive. Without the widespread impact of
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 programming during the COVID-19 pandemic, the national efficacy of the self-protection campaign and laws would not have been achieved. Contrarily, I have to admit that media outlets like newspapers, articles, and
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 shows currently exaggerate advertising and
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 regarding industries like entertainment and commerce that are mostly unconnected to people's private lives.
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, these contents only make up a small portion of the total amount of
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; generally, the focus is on extensively updating data of well-established trends of a developing era, particularly the occurrence of digital transformation. The opportunity for citizens to gradually understand the significance of technology and broaden their perspective to adapt to
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 tendency will be provided by the national coverage of
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. Considering everything, it is both impossible and debatable to claim that
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 is irrelevant to everyday folks. Evidently, it might have the effect of disseminating unfavourable
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 to a large population
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 simultaneously increasing awareness and providing vital
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 regarding global and societal trends.
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