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Some people think that the best way to improve safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles others think there are other better ways. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #safety #limits #vehicles
The
debeat
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debate
 on what
rules
 to implement on the traffic control is always talk of the town.Many people
suggests
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on
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limiting the speed
while
 other have
different
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a different
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 belief.The essay shall discuss both
the
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sides in detail .
To begin
 with, there are some people who
suggests
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 that,there should be a speed control measure on the vehicle for the protection of the society.As it has always
noticed
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 people are in
hurry
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a hurry
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 and to reach on time they tend to without
limit
.
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 ;
a
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if a
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person is late for his important meeting he is bound to
be ride
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 his car fast and that may lead to any mishap. Even , there are
younsters
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youngsters
 or speed lover who drives with
over speeding
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overspeeding
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limit
 which is
life threating
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. Alternately , others believe vice-versa stating ,
instead
 of controlling the speed
limit
 there
has
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 to be
rules
 on the
drive
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driving
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 pattern near the school or residential area and there should be
penalty
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a penalty
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 if the person doesn't obey the
rules
.
Also
 ,
the
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 road signs can be placed with the speed
limit
 near the roads where there can be more traffic.To
this
 , even
over taking
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overtaking
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 the other vehicle should be illegal as it is not safe. To
sub-stantiate
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substantiate
; it has
seen
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been seen
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 that many times
due to
over taking
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overtaking
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 the vehicle always the driver loses
its
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control and meets with an accident. To sum it up , I strongly believe that one should drive
with
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at
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the
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 speed
that is
 not harmful to
the
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society and the
rules
 of driving must be followed which
in
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results
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result
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lead
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leads
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 to a safe and healthy society
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