The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012.
This
chart provides information about the
number
of incidents of three different crimes, burglary,
car
theft
and robbery has changed from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
, the
number
of burglaries has changed rapidly from 2003 to 2012
while
the changes in
car
theft
and robbery are not that much considerable. As can be seen in the chart in detail, the figure for burglaries reached the highest
number
in 2004 at nearly over 3500, followed by
car
theft
's sum which was just about 2800.
However
,
the
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burglary's
number
has
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doubled to almost under 1500, in 2012,
while
the
number
of
car
theft's
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number
was not that much changed and decreased, it was around nearly 2500. The total of robberies from 2003 to 2012 was not that much changed. It just figured out between 500 and 1000,
then
it declined between 2005 to 2008 and increased between 2008 and 2010.
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