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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this .what can be done to solve this problem.

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Protection of national habitats is crucial and if any damage is caused to it, it can be a threat to the ecosystem. These days a wide range of
animals
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 are going to
Extinction
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 or they are at risk of becoming extinct.
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 essay will outline the causes of the
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 of wild
animals
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 and suggest some solutions. With regard to the causes of the increasing
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 of wildlife, it is true that
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climate change
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 as altered weather patterns, and rising temperatures disturbs directly
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' survival.
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, as temperatures rise, ice on the pole diminishes and polar bears miss their habitat.
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water and environmental pollution can cause the death of living creatures which may endanger the existence of some species.
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, the massive hunting of
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 can threaten various species with
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.
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, the hunting of Chiahs for their skin and other body parts in illegal trade led to their
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. There are a number of ways to control
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 situation like raising
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's awareness, developing the departments for care of
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 and so on. In fact, it needs international collaboration between
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 and governments. To be more specific, states ought to provide captivating and safe areas for endangered species and
people
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 should be aware of their role in protecting the ecosystem.
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, when the public understands the value of wildlife, they are more likely to take responsible action to protect them. In conclusion, animal
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 is
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 environmental issues and
people
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's unawareness.
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 said the course of actions suggested above seems to be the most effective one to take if we are to solve the issue.
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