Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit culture and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals believe that foreign

visitors

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should

be pay

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be paying

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fees

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than

locals

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local

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people

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when they

visit

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culture

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cultural

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and tourist

attractions

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in a nation. I totally disagree with

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statement

due to

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this

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trend

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can have a negative impact on

local

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the local

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economy, and

unfair

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is unfair

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with, there are several reasons why I believe

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foreign

visitors

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pay more

fees

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than local inhabitants when they

visit

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culture and tourist

attractions

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in a

country

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is a negative development. The primary downside of

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trend

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can discourage

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the tourism

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industry. To illustrate, the number of

tourists

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will decrease

result

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the result

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extremely

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admission

fees

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to attraction

places

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museum

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museums

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and art

gallery

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galleries

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, zoos, and historic

places

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less

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tourists

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means

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the economy of

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country

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the country

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will influence negatively.

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is because, when

tourists

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visit

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country

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a country

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they pay for hotels, transport, and flights, which

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less

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fewer

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tourists

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mean less spending on

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country

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the country

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unfair

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is another reason why I

against

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this

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trend

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. To demonstrate,

attractions

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places

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such

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attraction

places

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, museum and art gallery, zoos, and historic

places

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is for all

people

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around the world.

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people

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regardless of their

nationalites

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nationality

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should enter it for free or affordable prices.

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provide

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free or affordable

enter

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for

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cultures

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cultural

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places

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for foreign

visitors

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can reduce cultural differences among nations.

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is because by allowing foreign

visitors

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to pay less for

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cultures

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cultural

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places

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we encourage others to learn about our

cultures

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and heritage, which

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this

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can mitigate conflicts among

people

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, I completely disagree with

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foreign

people

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pay more

fees

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than local

people

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when they

visit

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cultures

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and

attractions

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places

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because

this

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trend

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can have adverse influences on

local

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the local

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economy, and it

unfair

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is unfair

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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit culture and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To that extent do you agree or disagree.

Your friend is coming to your country from abroad, but you can't go to pick him up at the airport. Write a letter to him/her and say -why you can't pick him up -suggest alternative ideas -talk about what he can do in your country

In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

In some countries today, people are having their first child when they are older. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone app is becoming increasingly common. Does these development have more advantages or disadvantages?