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Many people prefer to spend the money they get rather than save it for their future. What are the reasons? Is this positive or negative development?

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A number of
people
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 choose to use their income for buying something that can afford their life.
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,
people
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 will save the
money
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 for their needs in the future. There are some factors that affect
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 condition,
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, lifestyle, environment, etc. If individuals cannot save their
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,
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 circumstance will get some trouble. Health problem will occur when someone is getting older and do not have some
money
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 in their pocket.
People
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 who live in the big city have huge expectations in their life. As an illustration, when someone sees an advertisement for a discount, he/she usually is attracted by the ad.
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 has happened because it always is the main vulnerability of
people
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 to buy something rather than saving
money
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.
People
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 must have the sense to keep
money
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 always in their wallet and save it. Sometimes, they are using the
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 for collecting something special,
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, toys, clothes, jewels, etc. Collectors will spend a lot of
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 to gather those things because of a sense of satisfaction.
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, buying something like
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 must spend a huge amount of
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. If individuals always use the
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 for buying goods like those, they will lose their saving
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.
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 situation will affect their finances in the future. If humans fail to save their
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, it will give them a lot of negative aspects. To illustrate
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, individuals who do not have
money
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 in older age will feel more stressed. If humans feel stressed, they usually fail to be happy and get some diseases which will influence their health condition.
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