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Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people believe that enlighting people with an advanced schooling system is the answer to the
problem
 of
hunger
 around the world. Others argue that sending
food
 and other commodities as a form of
aid
 is the solution.
While
 in some
countries
food
aid
 is the sole way of alleviating the
problem
 of
hunger
, I will argue that empowering
education
 can be the key to accomplishing
this
problem
 worldwide. One main argument in favour of sending
food
aid
 to tackle the issue of
food
 deprivation points to the chaotic situation of some
countries
. Most
countries
 subjected to famine are often struggling with either invasion from a foreign country or a civil war making them unsuitable for any civil investment on
education
 infrastructure.
This
 has led to the exhaustion of almost all assisting options other than sending humanitarian
aid
 to help the people of these
countries
 stay alive. Sudan,
for example
, which has experienced unstoppable civil war over the
last
 decade, registered the most death by
hunger
 and
due to
 the situation, the only means of helping the citizens is by directly sending
food
 and necessary goods.
Hence
, the condition of some
countries
 prevents any development of
education
, and
therefore
 humanitarian
aid
 is the mere possible option.
However
, I would argue that in the majority of instances, improvement in the schooling system can lead to the eradication of starvation. The reason is improvement in the number of intellectuals present in a community would result in job creation and a decrease in the unemployment rate leading to a better economy. Take China,
for instance
, where the primary foreign investment in
education
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 system has now given fruit and made
this
 country one of the major economic powers with almost no famine
problem
.
By contrast
, those nations that have not improved their
education
 still struggled with starvation in their country.
To conclude
, in spite of some unstable cases where investing in school systems is not possible, I would argue that enriching the tutoring sector is the most efficient approach towards the issue of worldwide
hunger
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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