Some people are of the view that only university education can ensure success, whereas many others oppose this view. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
world, there are people that go to school to study for 5 years. The ones that want specialization, a master, or an advanced career, have to learn for more than 8 to 10 years. After learning for a long time, they start practising and, they are successful.
On the other hand
, it’s a population that never goes to an institution, but they have a lot of skills and they are able to succeed without studies. In my opinion, society can succeed without having a professional career. I will give some examples that explain why I think
this
way in the following paragraphs. First, going to an institution gives society a lot of tips to make easier their life
while
working on what they study. Taking classes to expand their knowledge, and help them to be more responsible by having due dates, being on time, and working with others.
Also
,
this
place illustrates manners that support them to be a good citizen.
Hence
, all of those characteristics make a nation achieve its goals.
On the other hand
, there are humans that haven’t gone to school, but they are very smart. What allows these communities to get what they want is learning from failure. Their practice makes them to be more perfect every day.
Therefore
, those become the stars in their field.
Additionally
, who is a hard worker is always going to be successful.
For example
, my dad didn’t go to university,
however
, he worked so hard his whole life that was able to buy many properties with the money that he saved and live from the rent. In conclusion, a university education is not required to achieve the population’s goals. What matters it’s to work hard and use their knowledge in the right way to progress every day.
Submitted by cagriffith on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: