Every year millions of people around the world suffer from poor health as a result of air pollution. What do you think are the caused of this? What solutions can you suggest?
Talking about environmental issues one cannot avoid looking at the alarming increase in the number of people suffering from poor health
due to
air
pollution
. In fact, its reasons are multiple and certainly, the solutions to accompany them are various as well. We will be taking a glance at them below.
The first to mention in terms of reasons for this
discussion is overpopulation. No one can deny the fact that a dramatic rise in the number of people living on our planet has put severe pressure on housing and transportation, leading to deforestation for city expansion and the improvement of the transport infrastructure. That is
to say, our green lung which helps to purify the air
and enrich oxygen storage for human beings is being destroyed. That is
not all, a huge amount of exhaust from industries and manufacturing activities is also
being released directly into the atmosphere every day, polluting the air
with toxic chemicals. A case in point is that China is the nation having the largest population and the fastest industrial development but the highest level of air
pollution
in the world
Potential ways to tackle this
problem may include the following. Initially
, the government should introduce new laws pertaining to pollution
with stiff fines and punishments. Simultaneously, encouraging the use of renewable energy while
investing in pollution
prevention technology may also
help to alleviate the situation. Another possible solution is for schools to teach children the importance of environmental protection and the damaging consequences of air
pollution
in order to raise their awareness. Lastly
, parents are advised to set good role models so that the knowledge about this
burning issue children have acquired from school can be reinforced and applied correctly.
In brief, the above problems of adverse impacts on human health caused by air
pollution
bring in some discussion on the solutions. Indeed, the more effective ways to cope with this
issue should need a deeper consideration which is more or less beyond the scope of this
writing due to
time and length limit.Submitted by xbinh91 on
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task achievement
Consider providing more varied examples to support your points, such as referencing other countries or specific data/statistics that illustrate the effects of air pollution.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to enhance clarity and coherence. For example, you could separate the discussion on overpopulation and industrial emissions into distinct paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the discussion well and maintaining reader engagement throughout.
task achievement
Your use of specific examples, such as the reference to China, effectively illustrates the points made and enhances the argument.
task achievement
The suggested solutions are practical and varied, showing a good understanding of different ways to address air pollution.
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