In some countries, celebrities complain about way about the way media publicize their private lives. Some people say that they should accept it as part of their fame. Do you agree or disagree?

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Everyone has their personal life. These days,

superstars

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complain about casting their private lives on social

media

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, television and other publishing channels.

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, others think that they should accept it and take it normally.

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, I totally disagree with

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notion and I will discuss the reasons in the ensuing paragraphs.

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with, there are several reasons for

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situation.

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star

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human beings, they have the right to live the lives that they want. Everyone has some personal problems that they do not want to publicize in public. When the publishing publicises celebrities' private issues it would impact local

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, in the contemporary era, young stars are following the trend by watching social publishing. Younger

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are influenced by celebrities but they

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not know about real life. Celebrities

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earn money to influence more

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superstars

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live differently in the real and

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world.

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, nowadays, competition exists in all fields

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as the news industry.

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, the increased number of

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that competition between

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would rise. So, the news

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to engage

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audience

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these types of heroes and their personal life.

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, the

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gain their popularity among others,

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people

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do not know what is right or wrong information about stars, when they watch on television or social

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. publishing

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rumours because they want to become popular.

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, it

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diversly affects

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' mental health. In conclusion, because of the aforementioned reasons in terms of human rights and detrimental effects on

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' mental well-being

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and society in general. I disagree, with the view that famous

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should accept privacy invasion as a part of their reputation.

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Logical structure

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