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The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 graph illustrates the proportion of the modes of
travel
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 to and from work in a city in Europe in three different years.
According to
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this
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 ,figure
people
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 mainly used the bus, car, or bike as their transport service
while
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 some
people
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travel
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 by foot in the years of 1960,1980, and 2000.
It is clear that
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 the rate of citizens using cars for transportation was getting sharply increased over all
this
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 time. The proportion of going and returning from work by bike and foot decreased significantly.
Although
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 in 1980,
people
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 mostly used buses and rarely went by their own foot,
whereas
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 in 1960 the most popular
travel
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 method was walking.
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However
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 the usage of buses was highest in 1980
while
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 it showed its lowest percentage in 2000.
Overall
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, we can see that the usage of cars had been increased in 2000 more than any other method. On the other ,hand
people
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 were avoid bikes as their
travel
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 method to work in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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