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Band 2

Some countries with long average working hours are more economically successful than their countries which do not have a long working time. To what extent do you agree?

#countries #hours #time
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Many people argue that extension of
work
 duration
lead
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leads
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 towards the development of a nation's economic status. I strongly agree with
this
 view and believe that working longer means achieving more in less
time
 and
flexibility
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the flexibility
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 of
work
 outweighs any other disadvantage. To start with, lengthier working hours aid to accomplish tasks before the deadline.
This
 means that the companies can attain
its
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their
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 goals before the expected
time
 and undertake more tasks.
Furthermore
,
increase
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an increase
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 in the pace of production and distribution,
consequently
 would surge the economic activity in a region.
For example
, during the mission of
International
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the International
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 Space Research
organisation
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Organisation
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 to send a satellite to
the
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apply
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Mars, the expected preparation
time
 was about 4 years,
however
, the date when the Earth is closest to Mars was due one year,
the
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so the
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 employees decided to
work
 around the clock, and launched the satellite rocket in 12 months'
time
.
Hence
, for economic
benefits
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,benefits
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 employees should be encouraged to
work
 longer
period
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periods
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 of
time
.
Secondly
,
work
Wrong verb form
working
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 from home has provided an opportunity to
work
 in
own
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my own
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 comfort zone p.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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