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Some people think that single-sex schools are better than mixed schools. Others believe that mixed-sex schools are the only way for children to learn. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

#people #schools #mixed-sex #children
Education is common for all
kind
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 of people without age groups. Whether
students
 should consider co-education or not is a
never ending
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 debate. There
are
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 massive
impact
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 when
students
 prefer combined class, they can
easy
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 connect with
corperate
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corporate
 workers and builds a successful
future
whereas
 only boys or only girls school have
less
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impacts
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 like excellent performance. Parents who admit their
children's
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 in
non co-education
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non-co-education
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 schools as they focus on
the
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better performance.
Students
 will not be
distrupted
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distracted
in
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 any unwanted activities or there is no chance to misbehave with
other
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the other
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 gender. To illustrate, there are
lot
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 of cases where
students
 in
cross gender
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 troubles for love
affiars
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affairs
hence
, unwanted mental illness occurs.
In addition
,
Students
 can do their
activites
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activities
 without fear and
also
, participate in all the extra-curriculum events like dancing, singing, speech and so on.
This
 helps to improve individuals to focus on
the
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 studies
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ends
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 with good scores.
On the other hand
, in co-education
students
 are
encourages
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 to sit anywhere and they have
freedom
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 to communicate with other genders as
it
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which
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 helps them in
future
 work culture. As they interact now, it will help them to handle their work environment in
the
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 similar way.
For instance
, even today one of my
friend
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friends
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 will not engage with his co-worker as she
have
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 a fear to overcome new people.
Apart from
this
,
group
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a group
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 of friends can focus on their studies and motivate themselves to sustain
together
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themselves together
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 to build
a
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 unexpected
future
. There might be
opportuunites
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opportunities
 to develop more innovative ideas
while
 doing their assignments together.
To conclude
,
Students
 are tomorrow's leaders so everyone's attention is to
uplift
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 their carrier based on individuals goal.
Whereever
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Wherever
 they educate we have
have
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a greater life but I strongly believe, those who study in
single sex
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single-sex
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 school will
benefited
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benefit
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 in their academic with
good
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a good
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 percentage but
student's
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students
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 from mixed school will have more exposure
in
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to
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 all kind of
activites
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activities
 that helps for their
future
 success and socialise with co-workers.
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