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E-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication,but this impact has been negative as well as positive. Do the disadvantages of usinge-mail outweigh the advantages

In today fast forwarding world,
E-mail
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 is
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one
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 of the quickest
way
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 to reach a person from
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 end to the other end.
However
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, through
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E-mail
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 lots of
suspecious
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suspicious
 activities and dangerous viruses are being sent.In
this
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essay
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 I will discuss
about
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the merits and demerits of
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 and complete
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my conclusion. On the
one
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 hand,
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 provides the fastest mode of communication next to telephone calls and in many global
industries
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 E-mails are used as
a
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offical
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official
 notification for
thier
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their
staffs
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. Post communication through the telephone people tends to forget the conversation but
E-mail
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 can be printed and can be read en
number
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a number
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 of times.
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, In
olden
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 days people used to send
telegram
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 which was
concidered
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considered
 as the fastest means of communication and it would reach
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the concern personal after 24 hours
where as
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 the
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 can reach
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the
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another person fraction of
seconds
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.
On the other hand
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, there are disadvantages of
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the usinge-mail
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usinge-mail
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using-mail
 system. There
are
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cyber
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a cyber
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 hacker who wishes to steal all the
infomration
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information
 from
a
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 unknown computer by sending various spam
softwares
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software
in
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 the E-main.
One
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 need not
to
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open
such
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 spam
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 even if they click the mail, the spam software will be activated without knowing the user and it will send all the
datas
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data
 stored in the own computer to the hacker,
then
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 the hacker uses all
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 information to control the computer uses to extract ransome of money.
To conclude
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,In my opinion even though there are disadvantages
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 using
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email which can be prevented by various solutions
hence
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 disadvantages of
usinge-mail
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using-mail
 will not outweigh the advantages.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • geographical location
  • documented form of communication
  • record-keeping
  • misunderstandings
  • promoting collaboration
  • productivity
  • long-distance relationships
  • information overload
  • miscommunication
  • non-verbal cues
  • blur the boundaries
  • work-life balance
  • spam
  • phishing attacks
  • security risks
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