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Student should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass the exam, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Schools have been a place where concepts,
trainings
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training
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 and information about certain aspects of
life
 or subjects are inculcated into people. Recently there
have
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 been an argument that teaching non-academic courses like cooking and dressing should be eliminated
while
students
 undergo tutoring for the subjects considered "academic" in order to succeed in their exam. I disagree with
this
 proposition because of the advantages that having both sides of
the
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education offer to
students
. Amongst the numerous benefits is the fact that
students
 acquire training
about
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life
 skills. Learning about some
these
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of these
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 subjects
involve
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 moments of teamwork, resilience, determination and
problem solving
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problem-solving
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. All these are vital skills individuals are to possess so as to live wholly in
the
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society, have good working experience with co-workers and achieve more in
life
.
For instance
, high school
students
 who learnt how to cook in school may be able to make their own meals when they are in college.
Additionally
, it promotes
self expression
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,
self discovery
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 and creativity. Many academic courses are regimental in their pattern and
this
 entails that these patterns are adhered to.
Whereas
, cooking and dressing have a bit more flexible pattern which encourages the actualization of these benefits mentioned. An example can be seen among
students
 who decide to use varying styles for their
outfit
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outfits
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 because it identifies their personality.
To conclude
, having
students
 undergo both aspects of formal education has more positive prospects than
otherwise
 because of the
life
 skills and personal development that they may acquire alongside their academic knowledge.
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