Some believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion

It has been a debatable topic lately
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whether
homework
should not be given to students or it should be regarded as an essential activity for educating them. Both
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viewpoints
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my position are argued
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To begin
with, some groups of folks say that some study work
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home should be given to kids as it tends to keep them
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after school hours.
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they can become undisciplined and more naughty .
Moreover
,
homework
helps the pupils to revise whatever they have learned in class. It is believed that for a sharp memory,
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must be revised frequently.
On the other hand
, some intellectuals think that
homework
is an unnecessary burden after
such
long
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hours for learners because they get less or no time to play and get
along with
other mates.
This
results in poor social relations
as well as
bad communication skills . In extreme cases , students
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depressed and mentally ill. A survey on school kids in India shows that
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suicidal
suicide
rates among teenagers have increased
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%
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in past . Opposite to it , getting no
homework
makes the pressure of academic performance less as they can play and get time for their hobbies .
This
helps in mentally stable , healthy and great communication skills building in children.
To conclude
, I opine that
although
getting work
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home
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have
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some merits but the negatives
outweighs
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them as pupils
feels
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it
as
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a burden and it not only affects their physical health but
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health in
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way.
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