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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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five different four main Australian cities, the outcome of an investigation into citizen's consumption of
tea
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 and
coffee
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, and how often Australians drink them.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4
weeks
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 was the lowest throughout the whole time frame,
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 in all cities, except Adelaide, those who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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last
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 4
weeks
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 were the highest.
To begin
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 with, the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who bought fresh
coffee
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 was between approximately 34% and 43%.
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, those who bought instant
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 in the
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 4
weeks
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 raged above 45% and around 54%. Adelaide was the only country where the
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 of
people
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 who bought instant
coffee
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 in the
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 4
weeks
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 exceeded the figure of those who went to a cafe for
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 or
tea
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 in the
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 4
weeks
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, by almost 50%. Turning to the
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 of
people
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 who went to a cafe for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in the
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 4
weeks
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, Melbourn accounted for the largest figure at roughly 63%, which was nearly the same as Hobart's number.
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, Adelaide was the smallest number at under 50%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, percentage, people, weeks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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