The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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bar graph illustrates
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five different four main Australian cities, the outcome of an investigation into citizen's consumption of
tea
and
coffee
, and how often Australians drink them.
Overall
, the
percentage
of
people
who bought fresh
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
was the lowest throughout the whole time frame,
while
in all cities, except Adelaide, those who went to a cafe for
coffee
or
tea
in
last
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4
weeks
were the highest.
To begin
with, the
percentage
of
people
who bought fresh
coffee
was between approximately 34% and 43%.
On the other hand
, those who bought instant
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
raged above 45% and around 54%. Adelaide was the only country where the
percentage
of
people
who bought instant
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
exceeded the figure of those who went to a cafe for
coffee
or
tea
in the
last
4
weeks
, by almost 50%. Turning to the
percentage
of
people
who went to a cafe for
coffee
or
tea
in the
last
4
weeks
, Melbourn accounted for the largest figure at roughly 63%, which was nearly the same as Hobart's number.
However
, Adelaide was the smallest number at under 50%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, percentage, people, weeks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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