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he given chart illustrates the level of serious violent crime namely rape, robbery, aggravated assault and homicide between 1978 and 2000.

he given chart illustrates the level of serious violent crime namely rape, robbery, aggravated assault and homicide between 1978 and 2000.
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The line graph describes
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 the significant violent
crime
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 including rape, robbery, aggravated assault and homicide from the years 1978 to 2000 in the US. To summarize, in the given period the total violent
crime
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 stood first throughout the
year
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while
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 people arrested for violent crimes were
last
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 witnessed in the US. In the
year
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 1978, in the US the serious violent
crime
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 level was 0.25
offences
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 in thousands and 0.75
offences
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 in thousands in arrests for violent
crime
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 and
crime
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 recorded by
police
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 respectively. Till the
year
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 1986,
offences
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 for the same slightly increased,
whereas
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 mid of the
year
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 1986 to 1990 people arrested declined and
then
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 immediately inclined in the minimal range until 2000. On the flip side, crimes recorded by
police
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 were continuously processed throughout the
year
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. In the
year
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 1978, the total violent
crime
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 and victimisations reported to
police
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 in the US was 2.25
offences
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 and 3.5
offences
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 orderly.
However
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, the offence level was up and down till half of the
year
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 1990.
On the contrary
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,
offences
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 in thousands started reducing in total violent
crime
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 and victimisation reported to the
police
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 with 3
offences
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 and 1.5
offences
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 admittedly.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, year, offences, police with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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