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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015.

The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015.
The pie chart compares 7 different countries ( Greater China ,Europe  , North
America
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, South
America
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,  South Asia , Japan and Africa) which  produced
cars
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 in 2015. Units are measured in percentage.  It is noticeable that Greater China and Europe play an important role in producing
cars
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while
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 South
America
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 and Africa had a small percentage.  In 2015 , 26 per cent of the average car production went to Greater China  which was the largest pie chart  and  Europe was
also
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 the main factor in  producing
cars
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 , making up,  25 % . Followed by North
America
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 and Japan/ Korea manufacture 19% and 16%  of passenger
cars
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 respectively.
By contrast
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, South Asia had 8% in the production of
cars
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 and South
America
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's car production percentage is half that amount .
Finally
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 , Africa is the most smaller pie of that chart , at 2 per cent.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words america, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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