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Noawdays online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or a negative development?

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The trend of purchasing items by visiting shopping centres or malls is now getting less and less of a concern since the introduction of online shopping. In my opinion, I see it as an advantage rather than as a disadvantage outcome. In-store shopping is now less appealing to the general population.
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 with, gas prices these days are on top charts,
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, just travelling to the store is already costly. A case in point is when you live in an urban area where the next available store is approximately 10 kilometres from where you are and the only item you want to buy is a $7 kitchen item. It would not make sense to travel that far for an inexpensive item. 
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, it would be time-consuming.
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, cities like New York or London have terrible traffic conditions,
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, moving by car would take so much of your day. Places like the Tokyo metropolitan have jump-packed subway stations as well, which is just as stressful. It would be preferable if there is another option that would make your life easier. And there is.
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 why online shopping is getting more attention because of the convenience it provides. For a lazy bum an introvert like me,
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 is the best to go. With a click of a finger, the gas money and time-constraint issue is now a dream away. By and large, shopping online serves the best since it provides fewer issues financial-wise and time-wise. Because of the convenience it offers, online shopping has more advantages than not.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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