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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Globalisation made the whole world a small village. It made the
availability
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 of
goods
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 and
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 universal.
People
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 can buy
goods
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 from anywhere in the world. It has made trade and
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 available in
countries
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 where
goods
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 are not produced. I will discuss whether it is a positive or negative development. Fruit like avocado is available in Asia too.
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 some
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 cant reap the benefits of globalisation. The
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 of
goods
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 and
services
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 has become universal.
People
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 find it similar that they can find
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 in foreign
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 too which are available in their
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.
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,Even tourists find that they are getting the same kind of facilities which are available in their
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 like 5-star hotels, rental cabs, and food delivery by
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.
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, tourists find Uber cab
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 in India too which are available in the US.
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, the
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 of transportation has skyrocketed across the globe . because of
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 of
goods
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 is becoming dearer.
People
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 find it expensive to consume
goods
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 and
services
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 which are imported into their
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.
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, One
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 indicator is the big mac index which represents the
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 of one McDonald's burger
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 in their country. In
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 like
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India it is three US$.To cite an example,
goods
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 in
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 like UAE
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 dearer as the
cost
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 of transportation is high.I believe that
goods
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 and
services
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 should be universally available. In conclusion,
countries
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 should become similar as far as the
availability
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 of
goods
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 and
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 is concerned.
People
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 should have the same standard of
goods
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 and
services
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 available to them it is a positive development .

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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