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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In some parts of the world,
parents
 used to declare to their
children
 that they can be successful in every area if they try their best as a cultural behaviour. In
this
 essay, it will be discussed the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 act for
parents
. In my perspective, one of the positive effects of
this
 behaviour is to make
children
 have decent confidence about their abilities. Because at younger ages,
people
 have a tendency to believe they are not enough to accomplish what they desire.
For instance
, some
people
 may feel more encouraged when someone tells them that they are not enough clever or hard worker to achieve something.
However
 for me, if they tell me that I have the potential of getting any achievements, it really boosts my motivation.
Secondly
, Another advantage of telling
children
 they are capable of achieving everything if they try hard is to push
children
 to become successful
people
. Because every
people
 needs someone who believes and supports them in their life. One of the disadvantages of
parents
 telling their kids that they can be successful anything if they work hard is
children
 may feel so much pressure after hearing those kinds of words from their
parents
. Because they may think that they have to gain achievement everything when they tried so hard. But
children
 need to learn that everything may not happen how they are expected even when they tried so hard for it.
For example
, I choose to study science class at high school because my
parents
 encouraged me to do that. I thought I could handle all the math and science classes easily If I spent some time studying
however
 it didn't go what exactly I thought.
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