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The pei charts and the table show the primary sources and the total amount of fish that transported into United States in the year 1988 to 2000.

The pei charts and the table show the primary sources and the total amount of fish that transported into United States in the year 1988 to 2000.
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The
pei
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pie
 charts and the table show the primary sources and the total
amount
 of
fish
 that
transported
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were transported
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 into
United
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the United
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 States in the
year
 1988 to 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 China and Canada were the main countries that sent
fish
 to
US
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the US
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 and the total
of
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capital which
were
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was
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 spent
for
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on
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 buying
fish
 nearly doubled
at
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in
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 the
last
year
. The table
showed
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shows
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 that in the
year
 1988, the least
amount
 of money was spent
exactely
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exactly
 6.57 billion Dollars.
In addition
, four years later,
this
amount
 increased by 2%.
Furthermore
, in the
year
of
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2000, it reached
to
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the highest
amount
10.72
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of 10.72
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 billion Dollars. The pie charts revealed that
the
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60% of exported
fish
 was from Canada alone in the
year
 1998,
while
this
 rate
dicreased
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decreased
 by half in the
year
 2000.
Further
, the percentage of other sources nearly reached
to
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the
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50% and
the
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China increased by 7% in 1998.
Additionally
, two years later, China reached into 30% alone.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, fish, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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