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The bar chart shows the numbers of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in three years and compaire with European everages.

The bar chart shows the numbers of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in three years and compaire with European everages.
This
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 graph shows us the changes in the count of
cars
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 in 10 years.
Firstly
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, you can see in country 4 the number of
cars
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 was totally the same in the 10 years. In
countries
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 1 and 2 the number of
cars
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 in 2009 remarkably rose
however
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 the average of 5
countries
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 hadn't risen which showed only two
countries
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 economic increase.
Secondly
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, Country 5 always had the highest counts of
cars
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thus
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 the average of 5
countries
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 of changes had directly connected with. The movement in the bars had changed in the same ways. In conclusion, country 5 affected the average of 5
countries
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 the most because it had the largest number of
cars
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Average
  • Comparison
  • Fluctuations
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Dip
  • Outperform
  • Lag behind
  • Demographic factors
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Mobility demand
  • Environmental concerns
  • Policy implications
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