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In some countries, people spend long hours at work. Why does this happen? Is it positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, working overtime is increasingly common for employees in many different parts of the world. There are many reasons behind
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 phenomenon and I believe
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 brings more harm than good to
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. There are two main reasons for the extension of working
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 want to earn more money, which will satisfy their demand to afford their lives. In
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 day and age, the living cost is much higher than before, not only in metropolises but
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 in rural areas.
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 puts a large financial burden on employees, especially ones who are the breadwinner in the family.
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 have to
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 extra
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 to feed themselves and their families, and
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 have to cope with a heavy workload these days, which makes them spend longer
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 at
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. If
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 do not extend their working
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, they may not meet the deadlines and be unable to finish given tasks, which prevents them from climbing the career ladder. Despite the benefits that
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 trend may bring to
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, I believe it is negative
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 two major reasons. One is that it causes a lot of detrimental health effects when
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 spend too much
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 working. Overworking gives
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 little
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 to rest, and if
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, it may cause some physical diseases relating to the back, neck, eyes and even heart.
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, dealing with a high volume of
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 makes
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 suffer from mental problems
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 trend is
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 can not get a
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-life balance. Many
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 tend to spend more than half a day working, which makes it impossible for them to spend enough
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 for themselves and their loved ones including family and friends.
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 leads to the fact that
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 may find no fun in life because they have no
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 for family and their relationships are
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 likely to be broken. In conclusion, the tendency to
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 extra
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 is caused by the increasing living expenses and overwhelming workload. Personally, I believe
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 brings more negative impacts to individuals
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalent
  • economic pressures
  • financial stability
  • competitive job markets
  • corporate cultures
  • stigma
  • demonstrate dedication
  • advent of technology
  • blurred the lines
  • accelerated career progression
  • dedicated employee
  • significant negative implications
  • stress levels
  • mental health
  • physical health
  • social and family time
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • flexible working hours
  • work-life balance
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