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The maps illustrate the developments that took place at Queen Mary infirmary over 3 different time periods (1960, 1980, 2000).

The maps illustrate the developments that took place at Queen Mary infirmary over 3 different time periods (1960, 1980, 2000).
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The maps illustrate the developments that took place at Queen Mary
infirmary
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 over 3 different time periods (1960, 1980, 2000).
Overall
, a comparison of
three
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the three
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 maps reveals a change like building and demolishing some establishments. In 1960, the hospital was divided
four
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into four
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 areas, but during the next 20
years
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 it experienced dramatic changes. The hospital which is located
in
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on
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 the north-east side of the area expanded its capacity by constructing the pharmacy.
Moreover
, a shopping
centre
removed
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was removed
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 and
cancer
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a cancer
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centre
erected
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was erected
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 in the
north-west
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northwest
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 of the place where
located
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the chopping
centre
before
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was located
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. In 1980, farmland gave way to a nursing school. Meanwhile,
during
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for
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 twenty years car
park
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parks
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 were left in the south-east area. In 2000, the measure of cancer
centre
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centres
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 enlarged thrice
then
range
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a range
the range
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 of nursing
school
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schools
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 and car
park
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parks
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reduced
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was reduced
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 by 50%. The hospital witnessed
altering
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 in 1980 and remained the same in 2000. The main road which encompassed north of the hospital never changed in the history of 40 years.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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