The charts below give information about the typical temperatures in London, New York, and Sydney as well as total hours of sunshine for each city.

The charts below give information about the typical temperatures in London, New York, and Sydney as well as total hours of sunshine for each city.
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the details about the typical temperatures in three different countries in each month and the total
hours
of sunshine in each city. To summarize, the typical
temperature
in
Sydney
stood first followed by
London
and New
York
. The total
hours
of sunshine in New
York
was
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than others. In January, the
temperature
in
Sydney
was 26
while
3 and 9 in New
York
and
London
admittedly. Till September, the normal
temperature
in New
York
and
London
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slightly
increased
whereas
in
Sydney
slowly decreased.
Further
, the average
temperature
in
Sydney
started to incline till December and
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with 24.
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in New
York
and
London
rapidly reduced and reached 5 and 7 orderly in the month of December. Turning to the table, the total
hours
of sunshine in New
York
was 2535, following that
Sydney
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in Sydney
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and
London
with 2473 and 1180 total
hours
.
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