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The charts below give information about the typical temperatures in London, New York, and Sydney as well as total hours of sunshine for each city.

The charts below give information about the typical temperatures in London, New York, and Sydney as well as total hours of sunshine for each city.
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The line graph describes
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 the details about the typical temperatures in three different countries in each month and the total
hours
 of sunshine in each city. To summarize, the typical
temperature
 in
Sydney
 stood first followed by
London
 and New
York
. The total
hours
 of sunshine in New
York
was
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highest
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 than others. In January, the
temperature
 in
Sydney
 was 26
while
 3 and 9 in New
York
 and
London
 admittedly. Till September, the normal
temperature
 in New
York
 and
London
slighty
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slightly
 increased
whereas
 in
Sydney
 slowly decreased.
Further
, the average
temperature
 in
Sydney
 started to incline till December and
ends
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 with 24.
On the contrary
,
temperature
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 in New
York
 and
London
 rapidly reduced and reached 5 and 7 orderly in the month of December. Turning to the table, the total
hours
 of sunshine in New
York
 was 2535, following that
Sydney
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in Sydney
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 and
London
 with 2473 and 1180 total
hours
.
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