The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2005 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons.

The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2005 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons.
The maps describe how the first floor of the art
gallery
has changed since 2005. In 2005, the
gallery
had 4
exhibition
rooms in total, 3 of which lined up on the east side,
while
the other was to the left of the
entrance
. Directly facing the
entrance
was a round reception counter, immediately before the stairs in the north wing. A café could be in the northwest corner, with a
gallery
office to its south.
Overall
, the art
gallery
has been made more convenient with the addition of new facilities
such
as a children’s area and a
gallery
shop, albeit at the expense of some old features. Of particular note is the construction of a ramp for wheelchairs and a lift, which has made the
gallery
more accessible to the disabled. The
gallery
's ground floor has seen some major changes over the years.
Although
the
exhibition
rooms along the east side remain intact, the fourth
exhibition
room has been repurposed into a temporary
exhibition
and a children’s area. The reception counter has been relocated to the centre, and it now faces the newly-built
entrance
hall by the
entrance
. The café and
gallery
office have
also
been converted into a
gallery
shop and an area for a vending machine.
Finally
, accessibility of the
gallery
has greatly improved with the addition of a lift by the stairs and a ramp for wheelchairs to the left of the
entrance
.
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