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The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2005 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons.

The maps below show the changes in the art gallery ground floor in 2005 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparisons.
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The maps describe how the first floor of the art
gallery
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 has changed since 2005. In 2005, the
gallery
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 had 4
exhibition
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 rooms in total, 3 of which lined up on the east side,
while
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 the other was to the left of the
entrance
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. Directly facing the
entrance
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 was a round reception counter, immediately before the stairs in the north wing. A café could be in the northwest corner, with a
gallery
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 office to its south.
Overall
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, the art
gallery
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 has been made more convenient with the addition of new facilities
such
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 as a children’s area and a
gallery
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 shop, albeit at the expense of some old features. Of particular note is the construction of a ramp for wheelchairs and a lift, which has made the
gallery
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 more accessible to the disabled. The
gallery
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's ground floor has seen some major changes over the years.
Although
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 the
exhibition
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 rooms along the east side remain intact, the fourth
exhibition
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 room has been repurposed into a temporary
exhibition
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 and a children’s area. The reception counter has been relocated to the centre, and it now faces the newly-built
entrance
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 hall by the
entrance
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. The café and
gallery
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 office have
also
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 been converted into a
gallery
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 shop and an area for a vending machine.
Finally
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, accessibility of the
gallery
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 has greatly improved with the addition of a lift by the stairs and a ramp for wheelchairs to the left of the
entrance
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gallery, exhibition, entrance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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