Vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people think that vaccinating children against preventable
diabities
is dangerous Correct your spelling
diabetes
disabilities
as well as
,
it is Remove the comma
apply
also
un_necessary. I am completely against this
notion. As vaccination
protects them from death, in addition
to makes
them have a healthy Wrong verb form
making
life
.
Our children's bodies are weak and need to be strong and healthy, to have the ability to continoue
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continue
this
hard life
. Therefore
, by vaccinating them they will be more adabtable
to Correct your spelling
adaptable
this
life
. To illustrate, Doctors said
that when the body takes Wrong verb form
say
small
about of Correct article usage
a small
viruis
the white blood cells recognise these Correct your spelling
virus
viruses
virues
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viruses
virtues
then
the body will have the ability to get red from a disese
that Correct your spelling
disease
come
from Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
this
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these
viruis
. Correct your spelling
viruses
This
means that vaccinating our newborns is a good idea. Additionally
, newborns
bodies can regenerate faster than Change noun form
newborns'
newborn's
adults
. So the benefits of Change noun form
adults'
adult's
vaccination
has
increased.
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have
Besides
, these will lead to increase
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an increase
of
their Change preposition
in
life
. They will live longer than before. So that productivity in our world will be increased .For instance
, in developing there are some places where people there
can't Rephrase
apply
affordable
Replace the word
afford
for paying
the fees of Change preposition
to pay
vaccination
their
children Capitalize word
Their
died
before turn to 5yearsWrong verb form
die
.
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old.
Therefore
, neglating
protecting our Correct your spelling
neglecting
negating
new born
from preventable Correct your spelling
newborn
dieases
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diseases
are
really dangerous for the world and their health, productivity and Correct subject-verb agreement
is
life
. To explain, developed countries are made a healthy protectable program for their new generations. Hence
, they are
live longer, Unnecessary verb
apply
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and heather
heather
than others.
In conclusion, I agree with the importance of Correct your spelling
healthier
vaccination
of
our new generation. As it gives them a healthy Change preposition
for
life
and a
productive one, Correct article usage
apply
as well as
, makes them live a longer life
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