Vaccinating children against preventable diseases is not only unnecessary but also dangerous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that vaccinating children against preventable
diabities
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diabetes
disabilities
is dangerous
as well as
,
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it is
also
un_necessary. I am completely against
this
notion. As
vaccination
protects them from death,
in addition
to
makes
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them have a healthy
life
. Our children's bodies are weak and need to be strong and healthy, to have the ability to
continoue
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continue
this
hard
life
.
Therefore
, by vaccinating them they will be more
adabtable
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adaptable
to
this
life
. To illustrate, Doctors
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that when the body takes
small
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a small
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about of
viruis
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virus
viruses
the white blood cells recognise these
virues
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viruses
virtues
then
the body will have the ability to get red from a
disese
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disease
that
come
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from
this
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viruis
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viruses
.
This
means that vaccinating our newborns is a good idea.
Additionally
,
newborns
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bodies can regenerate faster than
adults
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. So the benefits of
vaccination
has
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increased.
Besides
, these will lead to
increase
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of
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their
life
. They will live longer than before. So that productivity in our world will be increased .
For instance
, in developing there are some places where people
there
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can't
affordable
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for paying
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to pay
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the fees of
vaccination
their
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children
died
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before turn to 5years
.
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Therefore
,
neglating
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neglecting
negating
protecting our
new born
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newborn
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from preventable
dieases
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diseases
are
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really dangerous for the world and their health, productivity and
life
. To explain, developed countries are made a healthy protectable program for their new generations.
Hence
, they
are
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live longer,
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and heather
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heather
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healthier
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than others. In conclusion, I agree with the importance of
vaccination
of
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our new generation. As it gives them a healthy
life
and
a
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productive one,
as well as
, makes them live a longer
life
without being afraid of the mastery of death
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