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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is talents of peoples.

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
talents
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the talents
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 of
peoples
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people
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. It is undeniable that
capability
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the capability
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 of our life has become an essential part of our life.
However
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, there is no absolute agreement on whether ability should be
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talent
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 or hardworking. A commonly held belief is that
talent
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established
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is established
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 by ability. As evidence of
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this
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,this
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 they point to
sport
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sports
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 or music transmitted from old
people
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 to
his
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their
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grandson
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grandsons
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on
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apply
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by blood.
Furthermore
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, it is
prove
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proven
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 that, if your parents can
drawing
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draw
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 or
singing
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sing
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,
this
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 competence
inherited
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is inherited
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to
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by
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child
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the child
a child
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.
As a result
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, it leads to
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this
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the
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 view
said
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apply
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that
talent
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 goes by blood.
For
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example
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,example
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 if I can write poems or history it
is proving
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proves
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 that one of
the
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apply
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my parents can do something,
what
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which
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 means that I will do
this
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 thing.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 claim that
talent
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it
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apply
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is hardworking.
For example
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, they may mention that if
people
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 try something new, later
he
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they
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 would make
this
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 item.
In addition
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,
people
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 can't
singing
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sing
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, he
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tries
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try
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totry
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 learn different phases of notes. The explanation lies in the fact that improving skills in different ways will help
to
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individuals be important for themselves. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account I would argue that
person
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a person
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 who cannot be talented, later
he
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apply
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will be professional.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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