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The medical technology is responsible for increasing the average life expectancy. Do you think it is a curse or a blessing?

#technology #life #expectancy #curse
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Technology
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 always brings ease to public life.Medical
technology
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 brings high expectations for people 's health.I strongly believe that the latest
technology
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 in medicine has a great impact on society and now we have a lower death rate as compared to the past.In
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 essay, I'll shed light on the positive aspects of medical
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along with
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 some examples. On the one hand,every country is in the competition of having the best equipment to fight with latest diseases and for
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 countries are introducing new machines and medicines to save one's life.
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,in the past people were dying
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 cancer and heart diseases.
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 the data analyst of the United Kingdom shared now w person death rate
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 cancer and heart disease reduced by approximately 80% which is a great achievement of the latest medical
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,now because of
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 latest medical
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 doctors can deduct any problem in the human,s
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 in the early stages after having a patient's full
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 exam which helps to save patients' lives including children.
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,now after the birth of a child in the latest hospitals doctor does full
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 checkups just to make sure that the newborn is fine and not having any complicated health issue for
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 they use modern
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 to examine the child's
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 which previously was not that much possible and
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 that reason a lot of newborns died because hospital having lack of types of equipment.
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,I strongly believe that the latest medical
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 is a great blessing in our lives and it saves a lot of people,'s lives.
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