The two maps show an island before and after the construction of some tourist facilities
The
two
maps illustrate the changes that are happening in particular
islands to be tourist facilities
Overall
, initially
, the island
was unhabitable and it was not occupied by anyone. Then
it saws a huge converted to be a tourist attraction side. By adding accommodations, two
restaurants
and a yacht club.
The length of the island
is 100 meters. The green areas are preserved.
The island
contained forests on the two
peripheral sides of the island
. Additionally
to that beach. And a big desert.
Then
it adds to its accommodations near two
forests. The first accommodation compound is in a circle and all buildings are constructed around the circle . The houses are connected by a footpath. In the middle of the island
are added two
restaurants
one of which is connected by a vehicle track road to the sea to be a yacht club. On the other peripheral side of the island
, other houses have been built near the beach and these houses are connected by other footpaths as well.
The restaurants
are located in the middle to be near to them. Between the two
,restaurants
there are truck roads.Submitted by aloye.ahmed92 on
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