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Some people think we should keep all the money we earn and not pay tax to the state . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Now these days it is argued that some individuals should keep the
hard earn
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 capital to themselves,
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 others are of the opinion that it is right of the lawmakers to have a certain amount of their monthly salary. I disagree with the statement that individuals should not pay
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.The
government
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 runs the
country
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 from the
taxes
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 it collects. It is our moral duty to pay
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.
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 collection is mostly pivotal and can be used in the infrastructure of the
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 like maintaining the operations in every field of the department, ensuring the implementation of the national laws and promoting the development of education and healthcare.
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, taxation could
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 be used to aid foreign countries and stimulate the economy of the
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.
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, it is not wrong to say that
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 runs a
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.
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, it is important for the
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 to make
people
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 pay
taxes
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. Let us analyze why
people
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 do not want to pay
taxes
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. The main reason is their dissatisfaction with the
government
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 in serving them. They blame the
government
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 for things like poverty and unemployment but they are not completely wrong because
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 revenue is often misused in some or the other way in every
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. In developed countries, with their satisfaction with the
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's functioning,
people
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 are more willing to pay
taxes
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. Another faction generating dissatisfaction is the
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 structure itself. It is very complex and it drives
people
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 away from paying
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. It is
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 felt that
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 rates are high and
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 slabs are unequal. So it feels that it is not unethical to avoid taxation. Not paying
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 to the
government
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 can drastically affect the
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's economy. It is equally desired that the
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 come up with a fair
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 structure and use it effectively. Even lowering the
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 would help the
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 to increase the
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 collection.
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, I reiterate my opinion by saying that it is the duty of individuals to pay
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 and the duty of the authority to use it appropriately in the public interest.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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