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Band 7.5

Some people think eating meat is bad for health. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, most people prefer to eat
meat
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 in their day-to-day life. Having
meat
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 every day can escalate the problems of digestion and many more. I partially agree with the aforementioned statement, we are going to discuss more it.
To begin
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 with, eating
meat
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 slows down the process of digestion from 5 hours to more than 15 hours as it is too heavy for our stomach to digest . Recently, researchers have found that non-vegetarian
food
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 generates more pressure on our digestion system than vegetarian
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 as it does not get absorbed easily and makes the stomach uneasy.
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, in the previous few decades, many diseases have evolved from the consumption of rotten or infected
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.
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, In many restaurants, the usage of stale
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 has increased which led to various diseases and viruses. In 2010, swing flu was introduced which originated from the flesh of pigs and infected more than 23% of people around the globe.
On the other hand
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,
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 provides fundamental nutrition and vitamins to our bodies. The consumption of
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 gives vitamins like B12, C etc Recent study claims that people who prefer to have fish in their diet do not suffer a lack of B12.
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, my mother is a pure vegetarian and she has a severe B12 problem, but my brother eats fish, and he does not lack B12. In my opinion, we must include both vegetarian and non-vegetarian in our diet in specific portions. I partially agree with the statement that eating
meat
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 is harmful to our health from the above discussion.
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Structure
Ensure that your essay is more logically structured. The transition between the pros and cons of eating meat could be more smooth and natural. Metaphorically, guide your reader through your thoughts like they're turning the pages of a book.
Content
Remember to fully answer the question: 'Do you agree or disagree?' in your conclusion. You mentioned that you 'partially agree', but it should be clearly explained why you have this stance and what it entails.
Content
Try to avoid overly dense explanations or too many ideas in one paragraph. Make sure each paragraph only contains one main idea, and describe it thoroughly.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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