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Some believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both viwes and give your opinions.

#believe #people #interest #culture #country #region #life #viwes
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people
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 that these days there is no
interst
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interest
 among
people
about
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in
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 their ancient culture,
while
 it has been stated that protecting the traditional
approches
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approaches
of
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to
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 life, especially the ones that
related
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are related
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 to their country, is
considerebly
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considerably
considered
 vital. I think that individuals should not forget their
ancestors
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ancestor's
ancestors'
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 traditions and customs. On one hand, one group of
people
 believe that the interest
of
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 knowing about the past has been demolished.
Firstly
, we live in a global
world
 with the improvement of
relationship
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relationships
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 among
the
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apply
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people
 around the
world
. Because of
the
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some improvements in transportation between different countries and even between
continets
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continents
, visitors and local
people
 have some interacts and relationship together.
For example
, India, which is a country with
million
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 tourists per year, has changed significantly during the past few decades. Indian citizens used to wear Sari
in
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on
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 every
occasions
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occasion
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, but because of
the
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European and American tourists, the way of wearing clothes among them
have
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has
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 significantly changed.
Secondly
, technology, especially the internet has contributed the countries to
a
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 unmixed, uniformed and united
world
. In order to
that
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, some special
characrtistics
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characteristics
such
 as genes, cultural habits and
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the color
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color
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colour
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 of skin would not have a
tangibe
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tangible
 result in
people
's desires and
intersts
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interests
.
On the other hand
, another group of
people
 think that the culture and
custom
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customs
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 of every single country must be protected and continued by their citizens. There are some cultural occasions
such
 as
religous
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religious
 ceremonies, celebrations and
anniverseries
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anniversaries
, which are important for the local citizens of every
regions
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region
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.
For instance
, In Iran, we celebrate the new year with the initial days of the spring and we have some customs to
held
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 it in our way. If these kinds of old and traditional events
have
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had
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 been forgotten, they would have
been
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disappeard
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disappeared
 after
few
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a few
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 centuries. I think that older generations should determine
adequate
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an adequate
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 amount of time to teach these innate and
inherites
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inherited
inherits
 traditions and cultures to the next generation, in order to
perotect
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protect
 them from disappearing. In conclusion, because of the improvement in technology and the transportation facilities
such
 as
airplane
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airplanes
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, nowadays we live in an unmixed and
uniformed
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world
 without any differences among
people
 with different cultures.
However
, I believe that old there
shlould
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should
 be some solutions to protect the traditional way of living and our
ancestors
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ancestor's
ancestors'
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 customs from demolishing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Cultural identity
  • Traditional customs
  • Heritage
  • Cultural preservation
  • Modernization
  • Cultural revival
  • Intergenerational
  • Societal cohesion
  • Continuity
  • Multicultural societies
  • Revitalization
  • Heritage preservation
  • Cultural integration
  • Evolving cultures
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