15.Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that newspapers should not report information

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politicians’ personal lives. In

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essay, I will explain why I agree with

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view to some extent. I concede that there might be some reasons why some argue that politicians’ private lives should be unveiled by the media and perhaps the most obvious one is

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can prevent them from setting bad models for the public. If politicians know that they are being watched by the press, they may well be conscious about their personal

life

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, and

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makes them aware of the importance of being upright

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is potentially incredibly vital.

For example

, in the US, the media has the freedom to report anything they would like to, resulting in politicians performing well even in their private time, and

this

invariably leads to them becoming role models.

However

, I disagree with

this

suggestion because if politicians’ privacy is infringed by the press, it would affect their mental health or even lead them to depression. When politicians’ private life is reported to the public, they cannot enjoy their free time with their families and friends, in turn leading them to isolation and alienation. What

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does is make it extremely detrimental. My uncle Tom,

for instance

, works as a politician in China,

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been placed

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by journalists’ monitors for many years. As

such

, his mental health was hurt and has become depressed at a certain level, which is potentially why the erosion of politicians’ privacy will lead to their mental illnesses. In conclusion,

while

there are a few benefits of reporting politicians’ private information, I do not agree that

this

should be published by the media to some extent.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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transparency
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public interest
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15.Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

You recently broke your leg and your colleagues from work sent you get well cards and presents. Write a letter to them and say •Thanks them for supporting you. •Describe how you spend your time. •Explain about your recovery process.

Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned while others think that people should be free to choose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The unlimited use of car caused many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce the problems, should we discourage people to use car? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Unemployment remains the biggest challenges to school-leavers in most countries. Ho far do agree with this assessment? what other challenges face young people today?

In some societies, more and more people are deciding to live alone. Why do you think this is? Do the advantages of living alone outweigh the disadvantages?