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People should only concentrate on a single skill for life because it is the best way to succeed. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Most of the occupations in the society depend on the talent of the employee. If a person puts attention only to one talent, he/she can expertise that very easily,
while
 they can easily compete with others, and can achieve their goals. But, from my point of view, I consider diverse stances that, for a successful life people need several
skills
. In
this
 essay, my opinion will be explained.
Firstly
, The prime reason why I disagree with that statement is, that there aren't any occupations with regard to one skill ,
furthermore
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 now humans have to compete with artificial intelligence to obtain jobs. Compared to humans, artificial intelligence (AI) is competent in several
skills
.
For instance
, a human
news
presenter
, who is concentrates only on presenting
skills
, compared with the AI
news
presenter
, who has several
skills
 like presenting, analysing, report writing etc... .
Then
 the AI
news
presenter
 is competent than the human
news
presenter
.
On the other hand
, over the past few decades, the world has evolved and has brought substantial changes in every field. Because of that the requirement for some
skills
 has drastically reduced, and new
skills
 have been introduced to society. For example, in the past, there were several painting
artists
 in the world, who had obtained successful lives
due to
 their excellence in drawing ,
However
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due to
 the high technological changes in the drawing industry, the requirement of painting
artists
 has significantly reduced,
while
 new
skills
 are introduced to the painting sector.
Then
 most painting
artists
 failed in their sector because they didn't upgrade their
skills
 relevant to the requirements. But the other part of
artists
 have expertise new
skills
 and achieved incredible success in their field. In conclusion, It can be reiterated that
,
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 human should have competence in several
skills
 other than concentration on one skill, to achieve their future targets in life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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